请帮我看看我的托福作文把The recent years have seen the profound changes of people life style ,but it is still based on some basic invention by the famous inventors from our history such as Thomas Edison ,who is a very significant inventor

请帮我看看我的托福作文把The recent years have seen the profound changes of people life style ,but it is still based on some basic invention by the famous inventors from our history such as Thomas Edison ,who is a very significant inventor
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The recent years have seen the profound changes of people life style ,but it is still based on some basic invention by the famous inventors from our history such as Thomas Edison ,who is a very significant inventor in the 19th century .If I have a chance travelling back to meet a well-known person from history ,that must be Thomas Edison .Because he is an absolutely powerful and important people in the world .
In his life ,he invented many of the important inventions to simplify our life and impressed us .And we are still using his famous inventions now like the electronic lights ,which is wide-use in the world .we use the electronic light for house ,road ,restaurant ,hotel ,etc.His inventions took part in every detail of human’s life and also links every part of our life so we can not living without his invention .that is the one reason that why Edison is quite important and powerful.
In addition ,Thomas Edison spent all his life to science and made a contribution to the future science .If Edison has not been appeared in the world ,it means all of his inventions will be disappeared or invented by other scientists many years later .the humans’ life would not as good as we have now .the scientific development will not as fast as the recent either .And there is no doubt that it is a great lost if he wasn’t appeared in the world .It will badly effect everything of us .that is why he is so important for us .
Also ,Thomas Edison never gave anything and very ambitions.so his personality is the model for us to study .Edison was not a well-known person when he was young.One day he did an expert on the train and made a fire accident because his silly mistake .The silly mistake cause him beating by the leader of the train .since that one of his ear became deaf .But he never gave up working on his project and became successful at last .we can learn a lot from him .so he was a very powerful person .
Thomas Edison ,who was a great inventor and also a ambitions person ,is very important in the world and also a very powerful inventor .
if you could travel back in time to meet a famous person from history what person would you like to meet .

请帮我看看我的托福作文把The recent years have seen the profound changes of people life style ,but it is still based on some basic invention by the famous inventors from our history such as Thomas Edison ,who is a very significant inventor
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The recent years have seen the profound changes of people'S life style ,but it is still based on some basic invention by the famous inventors from our history such as Thomas Edison ,who WAS a very significant inventor in the 19th century .If I have a chance travelling back to meet a well-known person IN history ,that must be Thomas Edison .Because he is an absolutely powerful and important people in the world .
In his life ,he MADE many of the important inventions to simplify our life,WHICH impressed us .And we are still using his famous inventions now like the electRIC lights ,which ARE wide-use in the world .we use the elecTRIC light for houseS ,roadS ,restaurantS ,hotelS ,etc.His inventions GOT in every detail of human’s life and also links every part of our life so we cannot livE without his invention .that is the one reason that why Edison is quite important and powerful.
In addition ,Thomas Edison spent all his life IN science and made a contribution to the future science .If Edison has not been appeared in the world ,it means all of his inventions will be disappeared or invented by other scientists many years later .the humans’ life would not BE as good as we have now .the scientific development will not BE as fast as the recent either .And there is no doubt that it is a great losS if he DID appear in the world .It will badly Affect everything of OURS .that is why he is so important for us .
Also ,Thomas Edison never gave anything and very ambitions.so his personality is the model for us to study .Edison was not a well-known person when he was young.One day he did an experIMENT on the train and made a fire accident because his silly mistake .The silly mistake causeD him A beating by the HEAD of the train .since THEN one of his earS became deaf .But he never gave up working on his project and became successful at last .we can learn a lot from him .so he was a very powerful person .
Thomas Edison ,who was a great inventor and also a ambitiOUS person ,is BOTH very important PERSON in the world and a very powerful inventor .
问题补充：题目是 if you could travel back in time to meet a famous person from history what person would you like to meet .

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we can not live这个有用原形啦……其实你可以写完后细心检查下语法错误 祝你成功

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Recent years have witnessed profound changes in people's life style,but it is still based on some basic invention by the famous inventors from our history,such as Thomas Edison ,a significant inventor in the 19th century .If I had a chance travelling back to meet a well-known person from the past, that man must be Thomas Edison .
During his whole life , he invented many important inventions to simplify our life and had also impressed us largely. And we are still using his famous inventions now like the electronic light ,which is widely applied in the world .Imagine our life without the electronic light used for houses , roads , restaurants , hotels ,etc. His inventions could be found in every detail of human’s life and also links every part of our life.
In addition ,Thomas Edison spent all his life on science and made a contribution to future inventions . If Edison has not ever appeared in the world , it means all of his inventions will be disappeared or invented by other scientists many years later (这句话有点多余).The humans’ life would not as good as we have now . the scientific development will not as fast as the recent either . Undoubtedly,it would have been a great lost if he had not appeared in the world . It would had a negative affect for us . that is why he was a great inventor,a contributer to human beings.
Also , Thomas Edison was very ambitions,he never gave up anything. Therefore,his personality is a model for us.Edison was not a well-known person in his early years. One day he did an experiment on the train and made a fire accident because of a careless mistake,he was then hited to partially-deaf by the train's conductor.However,he never gave up researching his scientific projects and finally became successful. we can learn a lot from this powerful person.
In conclusion,Thomas Edison ,a great inventor,an ambitions person ,also a very powerful inventor,is a greatly important scientist in the world history.

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