关于整容手术的英语作文,语法错误和论点上有没有不清楚的,或者指出不足也可以,谢谢美女帅哥了~╭(╯3╰)╮我在这里打不下,所以发空间去了~改在哪里都可以

关于整容手术的英语作文,语法错误和论点上有没有不清楚的,或者指出不足也可以,谢谢美女帅哥了~╭(╯3╰)╮我在这里打不下,所以发空间去了~改在哪里都可以
关于整容手术的英语作文,
语法错误和论点上有没有不清楚的,或者指出不足也可以,谢谢美女帅哥了~╭(╯3╰)╮
我在这里打不下,所以发空间去了~改在哪里都可以

关于整容手术的英语作文,语法错误和论点上有没有不清楚的,或者指出不足也可以,谢谢美女帅哥了~╭(╯3╰)╮我在这里打不下,所以发空间去了~改在哪里都可以
Would you like to become more beauty than people around you?Competition in reality of society make beauty obsession.Cosmetics might no long satisfy people’s appetite for beauty.With developing tecnolagy,cosmetic surgery has stepped into our life,like a magician,it turns an ugly duckling into a beautiful swan.However,do you really want the beauty brought by plastic surgery?In fact,the artificial look is almost nothing compare with one’s inner beauty except momentarily satisfaction.Contrary to expectation,common sense of the beauty is still disapproval of the fake beauty,not to mention plastic surgery is harmful to people’s health.To begin with,one’s outer beauty will fade quickly as time goes by,but one’s inner beauty will always shine.Elisabeth Kübler-Ross had said,“People are like stained-glass windows.They sparkle and shine when the sun is out,but when the darkness sets in,their true beauty is revealed only if there is lights from within." My best friend Joey back in Woodland school proves this idea perfectly.She is 7 inches shorter than me but twice mysize.Her friends always joke about her small eyes that she should open them sometimes.Even though Joey can’t be considered as a beauty,but she is still attractive.Joey is the president of Student Activity Council.She had organized many interesting and creative activities that brought joy and energy to my school.As a friend,Joey is friendly,humorous,honest and tolerant.She is like the glue sticks her friends together.All of her friends had said they couldn’t do anything without her presence.
Different eyes have different definitions on beauty.For example,some people appreciate small eyes,whereas others adore big one.In fact,people cultivated respectively have different sense of beauty.An American may adore women with tanned skin,full body shape and large,bright eyes.In contrast,Chinese usually like women with classical look that have skinny body shape,thin lips and small eyes.People describe their sense of beauty in the form of books,arts and media.They are the most successful method of communication because they travel all around the world.From these sources,people nowadays develop all kind of taste of beauty.So,one can never become more beautiful,because there will always be people opposite opinions.
Finally,plastic surgery have side effects which hurt one’s health,sometimes it is risky to life.Common cosmetic surgeries are breast augmentations,reshaping of nose and eyelid surgery.These surgeries require eithe skin removal or silicon gel ingestion.Cosmetic surgery has low risk in infection and scarring,however,if it unfortunately occurs,the effects on body are irreversible.People who failed cosmetic surgery are usually disfigured permanently.Also,there are underlying risks after the surgery.The silicon gel inserted into the breasts or nose can get shifted during exercises and damage one’s organs.The show 1000 ways to die describes a real story when a woman in San Diego got breast implants.The implants she got were substandard and filled with water instead of pure silicon.While on a plane,the atmospheric pressure caused the implants to expand and explode,and killed the woman.Life is a valueless treasure,we should be grateful for it instead of risk it for illusionary beauty.
All in all,a beautiful face is merely a shell.Self-cultivation,a good manner and rich knowledge make people to be more attractive.A beautiful appearance doesn’t make one to be superior also because of our various sense of beauty.Even if one believes beauty to be important,cosmetic surgery should never be considered because it associates with all kind of risks.A mistake during plastic surgery can lead to irreversible damage to one’s face and body,and may even cause death.Our appearance is a gift of parents.We are all beautiful as long as we have a positive attitude toward our appearance and appreciate what we already owned.

写得很不错，比我强，只指出几处小地方。
To begin with, one’s out beauty will fade as time goes by, but one’s inner beauty will always shine.
(The beauty will fade when the time goes by. But the inner beauty of s...

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写得很不错，比我强，只指出几处小地方。
To begin with, one’s out beauty will fade as time goes by, but one’s inner beauty will always shine.
(The beauty will fade when the time goes by. But the inner beauty of someone will always shine.)
Elisabeth Kübler-Ross had also said
(Elisabeth Kübler-Ross said)
Her friends always joke about her small eyes that she should open them sometimes.
(Her friends always joke about her small eyes and said that she should open them sometimes.)
people opposite opinions.
(people with opposite opinions)
Finally, plastic surgery is harmful and risky to one’s health and even life.
(Finaly:not a proper word to be used. Talking about cosmetic surgenry, it is so and ao…)
Life is a valueless treasure,
(Life is valuaed treasure/ Life is priceless treasure)
(All in all, a beautiful face is merely a shell)
After all, beauty is only skin deep.
make people to be more attractive.
（makes people more attractive)
.A beautiful appearance doesn’t make one to be superior also due to our various sense of beauty.
(A beautiful looks doesn’t make someone superior and it is also subject to different judgement. *better expressed in 2 sentences)

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首先我们先来学习一下整容手术英语怎么说
Plastic Surgery
For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes t owrite a short essay entitle My View on Plastic Surgery. You should write at least 150 words according to the ou...

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首先我们先来学习一下整容手术英语怎么说
Plastic Surgery
For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes t owrite a short essay entitle My View on Plastic Surgery. You should write at least 150 words according to the outline given below in Chinese.
1 越来越多的人接受整容手术
2 我的看法及理由
3 结论
题目分析：
观点论证型作文要求对某一问题发表自己的看法。通常要在首段提出话题，以及关于此话题不同的反应，并表明自己的观点，接下来要在主题段落里论述理由，最后在结尾重申一下自己的观点。
My View on Plastic Surgery
In recent years, more and more people, especially some young girls choose to take plastic surgeries. Some people argue that this kind of surgery can improve one's appearance, thus secure a good job. Others hold a different opinion, they consider plastic surgery as a waste of money. Personally, I agree with the latter.
Firstly, beauty is only skin-deep, as the saying goes, virtue is more important than appearance. Plastic surgery cannot improve one's character. Who do you think is more popular, an ordinary girl with charming personality, or a beautiful girl with arrogant manner? Secondly, success relies on one's abilities but not appearance. Some people, especially young girls dream to find a good job after taking plastic surgery. For example, it takes one at least 30,000 Yuan to have double eyelid. Fourthly, people have to bear the risks of an unsuccessful surgery which will be a lifelong pain.
All in all, it is not advisable for people to take plastic surgeries. We can get what we want by improving our inner qualities, such as our personality and ability, and there is no need to endure the pains and economic loss of a plastic surgery.
Beauty is only skin-deep, as the saying goes
就像俗语所说的那样，外在美不过是表面现象
bear the risks 承担风险
competent and well-trained people 有真才实学的人
arrogant 傲慢的，自大的
must 作名词使用

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