这是我儿子的一则日记请帮我修改一下,哪句的语法或时态错误指出来,but i'm not lucky at all,today is first day of september,it also is first day of the new term.but today i'm not happy at all,too.this morning,i got to school

这是我儿子的一则日记请帮我修改一下,哪句的语法或时态错误指出来,but i'm not lucky at all,today is first day of september,it also is first day of the new term.but today i'm not happy at all,too.this morning,i got to school
这是我儿子的一则日记请帮我修改一下,哪句的语法或时态错误指出来,
but i'm not lucky at all,today is first day of september,it also is first day of the new term.but today i'm not happy at all,too.this morning,i got to school eary.the teacher got to the classroom early too.but he didn't give us books,because the books didn't come to the school.waited a moment.he left the classroom.we were free.suddenly,a girl behind me wanted to i close the windows.i said:"there was wind,when the windows open.why did you want to close the windows?were you cold?"she was silent,

这是我儿子的一则日记请帮我修改一下,哪句的语法或时态错误指出来,but i'm not lucky at all,today is first day of september,it also is first day of the new term.but today i'm not happy at all,too.this morning,i got to school
第一句的but用的很奇怪,或者前面有上文?如果承接是转折,用but是对的.
第二句today is the first day of September.first前面要加上定冠词the,September要大写.It is also,不是it also is 哦.同样,the first day.
第三句but today i'm not happy at all就可以了,too没必要.
第四句early拼写错误了.
第五句the teacher got to the classroom.这里可以把got to 换成另一个词,因为前面已经有一个了got to了,换成reached吧.
第六句,the books didn't come to the school,改成the books didn't arrived比较好.（你的孩子现在几年级啊?如果大一点的话,应该要用被动语态了这个句子）
第七句,waited a moment是错误的,在这里.应该改成After a few minutes
后面的,i said:"there was wind,when the windows open.why did you want to close the windows?were you cold?"she was silent,
这个改成,I said," when the windows open,we can feel the wind.why do you want to close the windows?Are you cold?" 这个是用引号引起来的话,我们要用一般时.

but i'm not lucky at all,today is the first day of september,it is also the first day of the new term.but today i'm not happy at all,too. this morning,i got to school early.the teacher got to the cla...

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but i'm not lucky at all,today is the first day of september,it is also the first day of the new term.but today i'm not happy at all,too. this morning,i got to school early.the teacher got to the classroom early ,too.but he didn't give us books,because the books have not arrived.after a while.he left the classroom.we were free.suddenly,a girl behind me wanted i to close the window.i said:"There was a wind,and the window was open.why did you want to close the window?were you cold?"she was silent,

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