求大神看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方!is a science fiction and it can remind people to save Earth.If we still cut down trees or kill animals,one day,Earth will be ruin!And in the fiction,I also learn:we can’t be selfish!It’s a go

求大神看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方!is a science fiction and it can remind people to save Earth.If we still cut down trees or kill animals,one day,Earth will be ruin!And in the fiction,I also learn:we can’t be selfish!It’s a go
求大神看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方!
is a science fiction and it can remind people to save Earth.If we still cut down trees or kill animals,one day,Earth will be ruin!And in the fiction,I also learn:we can’t be selfish!It’s a good class for us.
Today’s story is about Scott.He is a good explorer.He and he’s team are very firm and have brave heart!They never afraid of death.We must learn them!
Money isn’t everything.Money can’t buy love or good luck.Remember love is the best thing in the world.If you have love,you can do many things!And we must believe love is eternal!

求大神看看我的英语作文有没有错的地方!is a science fiction and it can remind people to save Earth.If we still cut down trees or kill animals,one day,Earth will be ruin!And in the fiction,I also learn:we can’t be selfish!It’s a go
one day往往指过去的某一天,用 someday 第二排应该为 i also learned
第二段切记不能用CHINGLISH 今天的故事.直接用story也许.第二段第二行：be afraid of 改为they are never afraid of ..第二段最后：we must learn from them》
第三段有个矛盾.money不能买.钱不能买东西只能换东西,所以：money cant barter love ore good luck.
大概就这样.

Under the Moon is a science fiction which can remind people of saving Earth.If we still cut down trees or kill animals,one day,Earth would be ruined! And in the fiction,I also learned that we can’t be...

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Under the Moon is a science fiction which can remind people of saving Earth.If we still cut down trees or kill animals,one day,Earth would be ruined! And in the fiction,I also learned that we can’t be selfish! It’s a good class for us.
Today’s story is about Scott. He is a good explorer. He and his team are very firm and have brave heart! They never afraid of death.We must learn from them!
Money isn’t everything. Money can’t buy love or good luck.Remember love is the best thing in the world. If you have love,you can do many things! And we must believe love is eternal!
现在没有语病了。。。不过语言比较中国化。。。

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<> is a science fiction and it can remind people to save the Earth.If we keep cutting down trees or killing animals, one day, Earth will be a ruin! And in the fiction, I also learn tha...

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<> is a science fiction and it can remind people to save the Earth.If we keep cutting down trees or killing animals, one day, Earth will be a ruin! And in the fiction, I also learn that we can’t be selfish! It’s a good class for us.
Today’s story is about Scott. He is a good explorer. He and his team are very firm and have brave heart! They never afraid of death.We must learn from them!
Money doesn't mean everything. Money can’t help guarantee love or good luck. Remember that love is the very best thing in the world. If you own love, you can do many things! And we must believe love is eternal!

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