下周要口试 一分钟左右An Unforgettable WeekendOn January 1st 2011,I spent a interesting weekend.I got up at 7:00 am.As soon as I started brushing my teeth,the telephone rang.It was a friend of mine,he wanted to know if I would watch a movie

下周要口试 一分钟左右An Unforgettable WeekendOn January 1st 2011,I spent a interesting weekend.I got up at 7:00 am.As soon as I started brushing my teeth,the telephone rang.It was a friend of mine,he wanted to know if I would watch a movie
下周要口试 一分钟左右
An Unforgettable Weekend
On January 1st 2011,I spent a interesting weekend.
I got up at 7:00 am.As soon as I started brushing my teeth,the telephone rang.It was a friend of mine,he wanted to know if I would watch a movie in the biggest cinema in Quzhou afternoon.And I said "Yes".
I played computer games from 8:00 am to 11:00 am,it made me tired.So after playing computer games I slept for 2 hours.I felt better.
The telephone rang again at 1:30 pm,my friend said "It is time to go to the cinema." So I wore my coat and went out.
When I arrived in the cinema,I saw my friend waiting for me.I am excited to see him.We decided on Let The Bullets Fly,because we thought it was more interesting than other movies.
The film started at 2:00 pm,and stopped at 4:15 pm.When the film ended,I said "Good bye".And I went home.
I hope I can see him again next mouth.
Thank you for your listening.
有什么语法错误请指出.

下周要口试 一分钟左右An Unforgettable WeekendOn January 1st 2011,I spent a interesting weekend.I got up at 7:00 am.As soon as I started brushing my teeth,the telephone rang.It was a friend of mine,he wanted to know if I would watch a movie
1.On January 1st 2011 --> On 1st January 2011 (标准格式是 日期/月份/年 ）
2.I got up at 7:00 am --> I wake up at 7am
3.As soon as I started brushing my teeth,the telephone rang--> the telephone rang when I was brushing my teeth.
4.if I would watch a movie--> if I can watch a movie
5.And I said "Yes"--> and I agreed
6.So after playing computer games I slept for 2 hours.I felt better.--> I slept for 2h after I played the computer games and I felt better.
7.We decided on Let The Bullets Fly--> We decided on （电影书名等要加号)
8.next mouth --> next month （拼错了）
句子的开头最好不要用and,这关系到作文的好坏和读起来的感觉.对于评分是有一定的影响（读起来顺畅自然会有较高的分数对吧?^^）

第一段：an interestiong weekend
第二段： As soon as....rang改为 I was brushing my teeth when the telephone rang.
在mine,后加and；afternoon前加this
第三段：it made me tired 可以前面加and或者把it 改为which。
第四段：At 1:...

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第一段：an interestiong weekend
第二段： As soon as....rang改为 I was brushing my teeth when the telephone rang.
在mine,后加and；afternoon前加this
第三段：it made me tired 可以前面加and或者把it 改为which。
第四段：At 1:30pm my friend called me again and said...， so I put on my coat...
第六段：stopped 改为ended。When the film was over, we said goodbye to each other.
第七段：改为next month.
初二学生写得非常好，加油啊！！！

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我认为"I spent ainteresting weekend" 改为“I havespent a ....